Catching up. Did eventually give the huge, long, incredibly long story a try so I’ve been drowning in that for a bit. Have this thing where I can’t take things in bite-sized chunks so something this long pretty much consumes my free time while I’m working at it. Fallout Equestria was the same way, but I enjoyed that one. Anyway, first a few of the short stories I finished before jumping into the huuuuge story. Fun fact learned: 1 million words is way, way too long for a story.
This was a fun one. A comedic slice of life that nails all the characters pretty much perfectly. Another interesting look at Big Mac’s character, what he might be like when you get past the running joke the show uses him for. Great look at the family relationships involved, character studies on both Big Mac and Shining Armor. Would point nearly all the authors I was reading during the batpony contest at this story as an example of how to do slice of life right. Not that is was perfect. Even this had a few moments of clumsy telling instead of showing, but even then it was handled well enough that it wasn’t jarring.
Fun story. Nice comedic slice of life, sort of. Might be better to call it just light comedy? Anyway, this was fun to read. The pegasi controlling the weather is still one of the best worldbuilding bits in MLP. Manual control of weather and seasons just has so much potential to mess around with in a story both for humor and for serious drama. This story has none of the latter in it.
Augh! This was much too short. Just as the story was getting good it ended. Wanted more. So, good story. Good exploration of a world far before the show, before even the three types of ponies joined together as one kingdom. Good stuff. Really wish this was a novel length story. It would make a awesome start to a proper epic fantasy story set in pre-Equestria MLP. Ah well. Better this than a huge story that needs to be cut to about a third of its length.
Interesting alternate history for the early years of Equestria. Did like that the batponies were exiled for trying to bring about eternal night long before Princess Luna did. It hints that there is some other force that is trying to manipulate things to drag the world into darkness. The star spirits from Fallout Equestria perhaps. This was a decent story with too many typos, lots of misspelled words, missing letters, or the wrong word being used. The author has decent skill at storytelling, but seriously needs a qualified proofreader before uploading his work.
Guh. Over a million words and still not finished. I gave up near the end of the file I had downloaded. Most of the story I was really hoping I got the entire thing, wish I had just checked the last chapter in the file and given up earlier. This is a fanfic, or side story, by someone else but set in the same post-apocalyptic world as Fallout Equestria. Which I will say here, and again in the future, is one of the best stories I have ever read. This one… Doesn’t get in shouting distance sadly. There is a lot of nitpicks I could list for this story. Lots of little flaws, and given it’s length a list of it’s nitpick flaws could be a novel in itself. Mostly it comes down to the author has no idea how to pace things, and has no idea how to edit things down. This is a story that is almost stream of consciousness. I would doubt that the author has done the trick of writing a brief description of each chapter and arranging them to see how the story flows. Each chapter gets edited and the author isn’t a bad writer, but it is pretty clear that he is just writing each chapter, editing it, then putting it up which no real feel for pacing for the story as a whole. The other big annoying thing is it really does fell like he read the original world FO:E and just said ‘this is awesome, I should write up a story like this with everything turned up to eleven!’. Stuff copy-pasted from the original, then stuff that is basically just the same things but twisting all the dials to max. Some of it gets better. As the story goes on (and on, and on, and on) more originality shines through. Several of the characters are interesting and there is cool ideas in here. The single most frustrating thing is that just a few little changes would make this story great. If I could get the author to go back and edit/rewrite the thing from the beginning, it could easily be good enough to be on a shelf next to Fallout Equestria. Not quite as good, but a excellent companion work. Most of the editing would be chopping out so much of it. Seriously, this story is going to be longer than the entire Harry Potter franchise and have about as much plot as a single book. Fallout Equestria was long, but I always wanted to know what would happen in the next chapter. This is (probably going to be) three times as long, and I want to know how it ends, but I don’t care what happens next. If I still care when it does finish up, I’ll have to track down a simple summary.