Pony Stories 138

24 May

I’m sure this one will simply slip past with no comments. Just another bland opinion on a obscure piece of pony fan fiction. Nothing to see here, move along.

Moonbeam by Laurence Brown

I didn’t really like this one, sadly. It just didn’t have much feeling of flow to the story. It flips from one focus to another with no real bridge or feeling of smoothness. Most of the events in the story could be swapped around to a random order and nothing would really be lost. It also felt really weird that Luna has no clue who the mane six are, except for Twilight, but even then she doesn’t react very much to Twilight being right in front of her on at least one occasion. Didn’t really get any sense of either divinity or rulership from Princess Celestia or Princess Luna. No feeling of grace or majesty. Luna, in particular, didn’t give any sign of having any Earth Pony experience as an Alicorn. I mean if she’s the mix of all three types, shouldn’t she have at least a passing knowledge of Earth Pony magic? There just seems to be no reason for the main character to be Luna instead of just some random Earth Pony that just moved to Ponyville. All and all, this was just bland and uninteresting for me. I liked Sunny Skies All Day Long better. It was light and funny, which writing that grabbed me.

Things I did like about the story: First, it had a cool version of Earth Pony magic. One of the obstacles near the end of the story was overcome with one of the characters using Earth Pony magic in a active manner. So it wasn’t just a strength/toughness/passive connection with earth and nature sort of thing. It still wasn’t as proactive as Unicorn magic or Pegasi magic, but it was still something to be used consciously. I’m not sure I’ve seen that in any of the other stories I’ve read. Another thing I enjoyed was that that one of the characters had a cutie mark and a talent they use, but their job isn’t directly connected to it. Gives a more natural feel to cutie marks. That they simply signify a talent, not the pony’s entire life path. Related is that as bland as I found the story and events, all the characters were interesting. The author went with totally original characters instead of background ponies and that was a good decision. I wouldn’t mind another story with some of them in it.

I should re-read Sunny Skies though. It was one of the earlier fanfics I read and it would be good to see if it holds up.

How To Do A Sonic Rainboom by bookplayer

Sad, sweet, and simple. This has writing that flows very smoothly and matches the subdued subject matter well. Definitely a few notches above average. Recommended. I’m liking this author so far.

The Importance of Being Earth Ponies by bookplayer

Didn’t like this one quite as much as the previous two by this same author. Just a tiny difference was what threw me off, not quality of the writing or anything like that. Mostly thought the message was, well, a bit muddled. Still, the writing was good and the characters portrayed well. So recommended with a slight caveat. Will point out that the story, sadly, doesn’t involve any Earth Pony magic. It’s more philosophical than metaphysically symmetrical.


Posted by on May 24, 2014 in Books 2014, Ponies, Reviews


4 responses to “Pony Stories 138

  1. bchandler2

    May 24, 2014 at 9:10 am

    Not only is bookplayer a good writer, she is also a very sweet person.

    Bwahahahaha you thought no one would comment here. You were wrong!

    • Griffin

      May 24, 2014 at 10:26 am

      Cool. Good authors being cool people is a nice mix.

      Dang. Another world domination plan down the tubes. Right, on to try world conquest plan #592. One of these has to work eventually.

      • xjuggernaughtx

        May 24, 2014 at 1:29 pm

        I will second Super Trampoline’s response. Bookplayer is very nice and she was one of the first to offer me help when I started writing at

  2. bchandler2

    June 22, 2014 at 11:21 am

    Not to hug box, but xjuggernaughtx is a prettyswell dude too. Plus, he wears pimping suits at pony cons.


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