Yeah, I got nothing to put here. Maybe inspiration will strike and I’ll change this to something interesting. Of course, if you are reading this, that did not happen. (Or did it?) Three more ponyfic review-type dealies below the break. Wait, just glanced over at the comments of InquisitorM’s post on White Space where Chris over at One Man’s Pony Ramblings is being ignored as a reviewer (truthfulness of statements in my intro paragraphs are not guaranteed). One, that is the site I see if he’s updated every day even though I know he only updates three times a week. And two, he could always stop doing the review thing now that he’s gotten the rest of us doing it and instead write more awesome stories like Wyrmlysan and To Make A Spark.
This was not very good. I try to be pretty generous when describing stories, mostly since I think about how I’d want someone to talk about my work, but I had to force myself through the last half of this one. I think it can be summed up in, the big bad moustache-twirling ‘bwa ha ha’ villain is the elements of Harmony. The last third of the story is the elements floating around blasting things with magic lasers and ranting about how the pony race needs to be cleansed to make way for a new utopia. Yep. I mean, I’ve read a story that had something similar in it, but that was built up ahead of time and explained in a way to make things all fit together. Plus the elements were more in sorrow than anger, and they were nice, just alien. In this story they are pretty much just flat out evil. None of the story fits together. We have a controlling intelligence service that is everywhere and presented as a controlling authority with black sunglasses and kidnap people at will, yet almost everyone in that organization seems to be nice people in a bad situation. Seriously. Evil organization made up of good ponies just trying to do what they think is best. Oh, and nothing is done to try smoothing out that dissonance. It’s not a ‘system is bigger than anyone’ type thing. It’s just the reader is told one thing and shown another, then shown the first thing and told the second thing. Pretty much whatever the author wanted to do that paragraph. With the ending being a way, way too long pointless fight scene between two gods. The gods yelling at each other while the main characters just sort of stand around until one of the gods sacrifices herself to give one of the characters the deus ex machina power that defeats the bad guy. Yep.
Same author as Reach, two stories back. This one is better in that it actually as some logical coherence. It still isn’t what I’d call great. Average. Too many references to Blade Runner. Lots of places those references felt more like a crutch than a homage. Ending was okay. Not a deus ex machina, exactly, but not exactly satisfying either. This really could have used a ‘100 years later’ epilogue to see the ramifications of what happened. One of the basic premises of the story was that Celestia and Luna are always fighting. Apparently they love each other as sisters, but have never had any length of time just working together happily. Which isn’t a really good viewpoint for their characters.
Another fun, if not exactly light, story. Well, stories anyway. Each one is a interesting bit of worldbuilding. Nothing major. Just little glimpses of the not-so-nice sides of history. As well as the fact that immortal gods might not be the best judge about what kinds of stories should be told to cheer friends up. Worth a read, but don’t think I’ll ever be tempted to read it a second time.