Augh. Need to put actual work into these posts again. I’ve run out of my backlog of typed reviews I can just cut-and-paste into the posts. Curse you, minor annoyance and needed effort. Oh, and happy 4th of July to anyone here in the US of A with me. Hopefully the tropical storm about to hit the east coast doesn’t turn my town into a apocalyptic dystopia tonight. Oh, and for the seven people in the UK who visited the site yesterday, I think I’m required by constitutional law to remind you today that we won and you lost. Fun fact: dystopia is not in this spellcheck dictionary. Neither is spellcheck apparently.
I really, really hope this is a parody fanfic. Sadly, I don’t think it is. Given it isn’t over the top enough and the number at the end of the author’s name (which I’ve noticed tends to correlate with somewhat poor writing), I have a horrible suspicion that this is just fairly poor writing.
I almost didn’t finish this. The first two chapters are not very well written. Kind of glad I stuck with it. The writing gets better (though never reaches excellent). However, there are a few good worldbuilding bits I enjoyed and the characters were portrayed quite well. I had two major complains. First, this story takes place years after the show. They all talk about things that indicate maybe a decade or more has gone by, yet the story feels like it takes place during the show. None of the mane six have any feeling of maturity or experience beyond what we see in the show. Whether you think they are early teens, late teens, or early twenties in the show, the ten years after that are a fairly big impact on a person’s life. The second complaint is that a lot of this story just felt too modern. There was a good amount of pony theme and content, but also a lot of real world stuff, and the two were not blended together very well.
I would put this in the same basic genre as The Immortal Game, This one isn’t nearly as good, but that’s a high standard to match. The main problem was that this story wasn’t nearly as skillful at adding the violence to MLP. If you liked Immortal Game and wanted something similar, I’d say give this one a try. Just be prepared for really rough writing at the start and somewhat rough writing throughout. It does have Pinkie Pie hooking up romantically with a secret agent ninja, which was all sorts of adorable.
Sweet, and a bit sad. Not really a story itself. Just a moment where Princess Luna reads a letter from one of her subjects. I liked it.