Another day, another half dozen pony fan fiction reviews. Hmmm… Next post of my reviews is 200. I should count up how many stories I’ve covered. Maybe even get the counts of all the other reviewers on the big master review list as well, see where everyone’s scores are. That’ll make up for only having two reviews to put in the 200th post.
This wasn’t a bad version of the Nightmare Moon event. Just way too short. With a bit of build-up it could have been powerful, but there is just so much unexplained that doesn’t fit with what we know from the show. Recommended if you like reading versions of the Nightmare Moon situation, but if you aren’t a huge fan of that type of story you can skip this. Then again, it’s decent for how long it is so you might want to give it a try anyway.
Short silliness. I enjoyed it, chuckled more than once. The final punchline was pretty good too.
This is not very good. You should avoid this one. Hope the author practices until they get better.
Starts out as something resembling a situational comedy. Transitions into something a lot more meaningful. I quite liked this on several levels. The ending was, perhaps, a little weak. Still, I’d give this one a good recommendation.
Two neat things I enjoyed in this story. One, love finding more governmental worldbuilding. Both the little bits of the Immigration department and the little bits about the court system. I actually really like the idea of two courts, each one handling different types of laws. The second thing is that it shows a unicorn’s magic field reacting to their emotional state. A field holding a newspaper is described as spiking and flaring up. Never thought about how that might express itself visually through a unicorn’s magic. Not just the more extreme losing control, but the idea that unicorns have ‘body language’ in their magical auras in the same way pegasi have body language with their wings.
Edit: Oh, and it’s got a very minor crossover with five hundred little murders, which was a nice touch.
Decently written, fairly disturbing premise, but it felt kind of flat to me. Might just be that I don’t find that particular situation as horrifying as some other people do, so it didn’t manage to have as big an emotional impact on me that it was aiming for. Also doesn’t feel really pony. I have a hard time picturing Princess Celestia even experimenting with what we see in this story.
Very badly written. Halfway through I suspected this was a crackfic or trollfic, but I’m fairly sure that it’s just some inexperienced author who simply has few writing skills. To use an analogy: this story is a ten year old describing a movie he saw once.