Alright, I think I’ve got my aimless internet browsing and hanging out in chat room bad habits under control. Now all I have to do is stop playing minecraft and I’ll be productive once more! Might even get a story out in a month or so, assuming the cover art gets done. Until then, two pony fan fiction reviews below the break.
A decent story. Some good writing, a bit too much forced excitement. Fairly typical plot. Fluttershy and Big Mac’s first foal being born. I’d say this is fairly average fan fiction in tone, a bit above average in quality. Good enough that I’ll be getting around to reading the sequel sooner rather than later. Though the sequel currently holds the spot of longest story on my to read list. Which is why I haven’t gotten to it so far. Oh, the one bad bit about the writing is that this story has the worst Lavender Unicorn Syndrome I think I’ve ever seen. So if you are sensitive to that sort of thing, probably should avoid this one. I don’t mind it that much and even I had trouble telling which character was doing what in a scene or two.
Cool worldbuilding idea, cloud observatory. Plus the idea that Princess Celestia was preparing/hoping for Luna’s return. Aside from the prophecy/hero stuff. Just little things like building an observatory for her in the thousand years she was gone. As for the story, it’s a bit basic. Writing needs a bit of polishing. The random bits and pieces at the end would have been better arranged into some kind of order. Go ahead and read this if you are a big Princess Luna & Twilight Sparkle shipping fan, but otherwise you can give this a pass. However, reading it is okay too. I’d say this is about average in quality, and a bit shallow in theme and flavor.