Pony Stories 312

31 Dec

Okay, pretty sure the big master list is all caught up. At least for everyone I’m keeping track of at the moment. Assuming none of you other reviewers puts out a review today. Last day of the year, time to think ahead. I’m thinking that I’ll try to be a little more ambitious with the blog. Managed to do daily updates for a while now, which has actually been a nice boost to my self-confidence. So time to see if I can do daily updates with actual structure. Not to mention try to do daily updates of my old stuff over on FimFiction as well.

Big Master Review List stats: Total Authors: [1615], Total Stories [3516], Total Reviews: [5464]

Stories reviewed below the break:

  • Prelude To Change by Goldfur
  • Change of Life by Goldfur
  • Conversations in a Canterlot Café by Goldfur
  • Lamppost by Lapis-Lazuli and Inky J
  • The Changeling Trials by PastCat
  • Fluttershy Looks For Mr. Turkey by Ephraim Blue
  • Edited By by TheBandBrony
  • This Fragment of Life by Loganberry

Prelude To Change by Goldfur

Typical Changeling fic. I kind of liked it, but it was average at best. It’s technically a prequel to the next story, but it’s really just chapter 1. I wouldn’t read the next one without starting with this one.

Change of Life by Goldfur

As mentioned, the previous story is basically chapter 1 of this one. Read that one first. As for this one… It had the odd distinction of the writing getting worse as the story went on. I quite enjoyed the first third or so. It was nice fluffy slice-of-life with a changeling in hiding sort of thing. Sweet stuff. A bit on the simple side, but slice of life gets away with that easier than most genres. Then our two leads proclaim love to each other and, well, either an editor stopped working or the author just started rushing through things, or something. The writing quality goes downhill and things get really tell-y and abbreviated. Also has the problem in that a lot of the dialogue just doesn’t quite sound like how people actually talk with each other. Time just flies by and we go from falling in love to wedding to foals pretty much bam, bam, bam. Even though the in-story time is over months. Hopefully the next story in the series is better. Oh, and it takes place in the same version of MLP that A Novel Tale described. Which I didn’t know going in and has little to no effect on things, but I think is cool because I liked that story. Though there isn’t all that much connecting the two. This one did have one or two neat worldbuilding bits though. Ponies having magic fields on their hooves to hold and manipulate things. Twilight using a interesting way to heal a damaged pegasus wing and broken unicorn horn. Neat little details like that.

Conversations in a Canterlot Café by Goldfur

My kingdom for a scene with natural dialogue in it! I was hoping this would be a neat little slice of life involving post-invasion Canterlot and changelings. Pretty much just ponies rambling at length about changelings at each other. I gave up halfway through even though the characters and the general setup seemed neat. Just couldn’t stand the writing any longer. Edit: Well, I gave it another try and finished it. I’m still wishing for natural dialogue. I don’t think there was a single scene that didn’t make me think that the characters were all reading from a script they were all holding.

Lamppost by Lapis-Lazuli and Inky J

A good try at Lovecraftian horror, but the format gives it too much distance. The viewpoint is just too matter-of-fact to feel the emotional impact of things. Even so, I did get one moment of creepy feeling so it was at least a partial success.

The Changeling Trials by PastCat

I didn’t finish this one because the writing was just too rough to ignore. Lots of telling, not nearly enough showing, and a general lack of flow. It was mostly just statements in a row, or so it felt most of the time. It did have Celestia snapping in annoyance at someone, which is a nice break from her usual warm unflappable portrayal. Also had a “What in the name of Faust?” comment, so if that bothers you, there’s your warning. Also mentions night unicorns as a counterpart to bat ponies, but doesn’t make them interesting at all. At least for the one example we encounter in the part of the story I read.

Fluttershy Looks For Mr. Turkey by Ephraim Blue

If you saw the cover image and read the description you don’t need to read the story. It’s just that one joke.

Edited By by TheBandBrony

Different cover on the ebook than appears on the FIMFiction story page. That has nothing to do with the story, just an odd observation. As for the story itself, it’s about writing, writers, and editing. Reads a bit like the author venting, but most authors will probably get a ‘yep that is how it is’ feel from it. As a story, eh, not really that good.

This Fragment of Life by Loganberry

I’m a bit baffled. Not a badly written story, if a bit overwrought. I’m not sure if the end was supposed to be comedy or not. So… wha?



Posted by on December 31, 2014 in Books 2014, Ponies, Reviews


8 responses to “Pony Stories 312

  1. Mister Tulip

    December 31, 2014 at 9:50 am

    I’ve mostly been avoiding downloading epubs from Fimfiction until their text formatting is restored, but I downloaded a few of them about a week ago, and had that same different-cover-on-the-ebook effect on two of them. I did some digging around, but couldn’t figure out what caused it. The image files in the epub containers were definitely different from the ones on the site, but they were also definitely from the same stories, and judging by the Internet Archive, weren’t changed any time recently.

    • Loganberry

      December 31, 2014 at 3:10 pm

      Let’s face it, waiting for knighty to fix stuff like that is a bit of a fool’s errand… I’ve given up and now download HTML then convert in Calibre. A bit more work, but at least the italics are there. This situation annoys me a lot, as several of my own fics just don’t work fully unless the italics are present.

      • Griffin

        December 31, 2014 at 7:40 pm

        I may have to start doing that myself. It doesn’t bother me quite as much, but a couple lately have had annoying formatting lacks.

  2. Loganberry

    December 31, 2014 at 3:03 pm

    *grins* Mission accomplished. But if you really wanna know…


    It’s basically a slightly literary crackfic. Rarity comforts Twilight when she thinks Twi heads broken up with somepony. She’s shocked when it’s apparently Celestia. But it’s not… that last line should be taken literally. Twilight has fallen in love with an actual rock (the passing reference to Maud is a clue), which she named Celestia in honour of its grace… but Twilight accidentally caused the rock to break up (!) in a magical accident. In the story, Rarity kicks away the last fragment (!) of said rock, thereby making Twi furious. Why the Tragedy tag? Because Twi’s lover is no more and her friendship with Rarity is devastated.

    Basically… you’ve been rockrolled. *runs*

    • Present Perfect

      December 31, 2014 at 7:08 pm

      I’m slowly coming to realize that you are a horrible person. 😀

      • Loganberry

        December 31, 2014 at 7:45 pm

        You say that like it’s a good thing! 😛

    • Griffin

      December 31, 2014 at 7:38 pm

      I got all that. That’s what has me confused. I mean, the story requires Twilight to be a complete idiot to make any kind of sense.

      • Loganberry

        December 31, 2014 at 7:45 pm

        You’re making the fundamental mistake of imagining that this story was supposed to make sense! 😉


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