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Pony Stories 337

11 Feb

Another day, another handful of pony reviews. Also more snow, but that’s becoming pretty much business as usual around here. You’d think the sky would run out of the stuff eventually. Had another blizzard yesterday, maybe another foot or two of the stuff. Which doesn’t bother me too much, except that it made me miss D&D yesterday again. Grrr. On the plus side, actually managed to write a little bit yesterday. Not a whole lot of words, but any improvement is good improvement.

Stories covered below the break:

  • The Only One In Color by RazgrizS57
  • Customer Disservice by Estee
  • A Total Eclipse Of The Fun by Estee

The Only One In Color by RazgrizS57

A story of Dash and Pinkie meeting for the first time. Sad, but I enjoyed it. You have to accept a younger Pinkie that is wildly different, basically the opposite, of show canon Pinkie. If you can this story does a wonderful job of putting you in her head. The sadness, frustration, and occasional desperation. Rainbow Dash is portrayed quite well as well. I’d recommend this for anyone looking for a sad story with a happy ending. Mostly happy anyway. The sad is more of a low grade background sadness than anything that happens or is said, for the most part.

Customer Disservice by Estee

Had some funny bits. Reads much like a venting rant about a poor customer service experience.

A Total Eclipse Of The Fun by Estee

Good story, but buried under some of the writer’s flaws. The villains and the press are too much satire/caricature to be amusing more than every now and then. Next door to over the top fun, instead of hitting it just right. Too much of the modern real world honestly. I can’t see Equestria having press like that, and the chef and companions could have been very amusing except they are just so one dimensional and shallow that they can’t even support their one-note joke very much. So, my basic reaction is there are several good moments in the story. One or two funny bits, one or two touching bits, but when the story is taken as a whole it almost seems like they were despite the author. Like the author and the story were trying to do different things. Which as a metaphor could use some work, but I hope it gets the point across.

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Posted by on February 11, 2015 in Ponies, Reading 2015, Reviews

 

3 responses to “Pony Stories 337

  1. Logan

    February 11, 2015 at 7:23 pm

    The first two are on my RiL list, the first because I like the synopsis and the second because it reminds me of the old Douglas Adams text adventure/interactive fiction game, Bureaucracy. (Actually, it’s so similar I wonder whether the author did it deliberately. The object of the game was to get your bank to acknowledge a change of address.)

     
  2. Pascoite Fics

    February 12, 2015 at 9:59 am

    I liked “The Only One in Color.” I remember discussing it with some of my reviewing colleagues, and the big issue we had with it was this: the protagonist is a well-written character, but she’s just not Pinkie. She shares some characteristics and history with Pinkie, but she doesn’t act like Pinkie at all, and her use of language is far too advanced. It would require canon Pinkie to somehow have dumbed down her speech, deliberately or otherwise, after this story’s events. And that never gets justified. I mean, it wasn’t, because the author probably never saw that it should be, but imo, you can’t depart that far from a character without explaining how to get there.

     
    • Griffin

      February 13, 2015 at 9:14 pm

      Huh. I actually didn’t have any trouble with that. I accepted it fine as a younger version of Pinkie. Guess part of that is that I always figured that what we hear Pinkie saying in the show is only a tiny piece (sometimes a random piece) of what is actually going on in her head.

      I wouldn’t accept it as a current Pinkie of course, but as a youngish foal, sure.

       

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