Pony Stories 401

02 May

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  • The Royal Ponyville Orchestra by Distaff Pope
  • The Broken Wing by Cyanide
  • A Certain Point of View by InquisitorM

The Royal Ponyville Orchestra by Distaff Pope

A cautionary tale about not looking for sequels to download before you’ve read the primary one, because the descriptions of the sequels will have spoilers. Not that the spoilers are huge or anything, it’s pretty clear what’s going to happen starting a quarter of the way into the story. Still, some mystery would have been nice. As for the story itself… Have mixed feelings about it. This is almost the ideal example of standard/average fan fiction. Plenty of typos, more than a little generic in places with some cliches, but also having good ideas in it and having a sincerity that I found pleasant to follow along with. I’m not sure I’d recommend it, but I certainly enjoyed reading it.

On more technical aspects, the story is intended to be a series of journal entries. The style is more in line with first-person present tense though. So it is kind of jarring. Even with the idea that Octavia records things as precisely as possible, it is a bit jarring to have it written in a manner that could only be the perspective point being at the events happening instead of later thinking back on things. Plus putting day and dates at the top would have helped reinforce the idea of it being a journal/diary. As mentioned earlier there was plenty of typos and wrong words, though nothing too horrible. I much prefer someone who stumbles with the technical side, but still has interesting ideas, than someone who is the other way around.

As for the characters, Octavia, Vinyl, Lyra, Bon Bon, and other assorted secondary characters. They were all pretty much fandom standard, but the author puts enough little details and twists that (most of the time) they didn’t feel cliche. Lyra in specific actually felt like a actual character rather than a joke or cliche most of the time. Which is not easy to pull off when doing the standard human-obsessed variant. Octavia was the usual uptight prim-and-proper mare, but with actual backstory and character quirks that rounded her out. Was it all done perfectly? Nah. Lot of it was heavy-handed and often the pacing was rushed and the emotional stuff sometimes was kind of random. But overall I enjoyed it. Even if I did pretty much skip over the chapter where they were playing a D&D analogue.

I’m planning on reading at least the pseudo-sequel with Sweetie Belle, though not right away. I think I will skip the other more direct sequels focused on Octavia.

(later spoiler: stay far away from the  Sweetie Belle sequel! Flee, flee while you can. That one will be going up in a few days.)

The Broken Wing by Cyanide

Okay, that was amusing. Gotta love any story where Fluttershy delivers the punchline. Though Twilight snapping at Fluttershy in the middle part was a bit out of character.

A Certain Point of View by InquisitorM

Interesting little monologue. Not as off-angle as some of the author’s works. By which I mean that I didn’t feel like I missed the main substance of the story. Still, certainly not a fluff piece. Not sure this author could write fluffy if his life depended on it. Which, as far as writing flaws go, is pretty sweet.


Posted by on May 2, 2015 in Ponies, Reading 2015, Reviews


2 responses to “Pony Stories 401

  1. Present Perfect

    May 2, 2015 at 5:05 pm

    Augh, I hate when sequels have spoilers in the description. I mean, major changes you sometimes can’t avoid, but even still, it happens a lot. 😦

    • Griffin

      May 2, 2015 at 5:53 pm

      True, sometimes it just can’t be avoided. In this case it was the results of a romance that I didn’t even know was going to be in the first story.


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