Pony Stories 508

02 Nov

Today we start a theme week. Or at least I hope it’ll last through the whole week. I need the motivation and easy posts to keep myself going. What is the theme? Not telling. You’ll just have to guess. Which is most likely futile because I can’t think of any way that it would be possible to guess the theme. At least not precisely. So you’ll just have to deal with reading my reactions to pony fan fiction as usual.

  • Dawn by Titanium Dragon
  • Pinkie’s First Cupcake by billymorph
  • Diamond Eyes by Cerulean Voice

Dawn by Titanium Dragon

A contemplative piece. I enjoyed it, though would have liked a little more. Not a longer story. Just a bit denser. It was a slow thoughtful piece, and most of the time I like either faster pace or denser ideas. Still, this had a bit of worldbuilding, some character study, and a hat with a bell on it.

Pinkie’s First Cupcake by billymorph

Good stories about the mane six when they are young are a joy to read. I would put this one in that category. Pinkie Pie in particular has so much potential to be explored. If you want a nice story about Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash’s first meeting, you should check this one out.

Diamond Eyes by Cerulean Voice

I enjoyed this story. My one nitpick is Princess Luna using magic that let her share her sight with Snowdrop. I feel that it weakens the idea of Snowdrop turning being blind as a strength. Or at least it makes no sense that Princess Luna has not at least offered to use the spell at some previous time. Other than that, this was a wonderful story. A bit of worldbuilding with a classical spurned god backstory. Not to mention an interesting way of looking at the monster’s ability. Oh, and I really liked that when the monster came out the Equestria soldiers subdued it instead of just killing it, den though they were convinced it was a danger enemy.


I do think that the story would have been stronger without the sight sharing spell. The first use is basically just Snowdrop refusing it because seeing isn’t that useful in a dark cave, which Princess Luna takes as some profound insight. Which struck me as silly. Of course being blind in a pitch dark cave isn’t a handicap, and trying to focus on a brand new sense is of course going to distract a person from the senses they are used to. Just felt like a forced moment.
As for the end when Snowdrop looms at the transformed monastery, I feel it would have been just as good to have it been the saed Zebra nuzzling her, letting Snowdrop feel Zebra nuzzle instead of snake scales, and reply in rhyme about her name. Which would inform us that she was a zebra originally, speaking as a Zebra should speak for the first time in forever. Maybe even have her start speaking normally, then stop a speak again in rhyme as if just remembering how.


Posted by on November 2, 2015 in Ponies, Reading 2015, Reviews


5 responses to “Pony Stories 508

  1. Loganberry

    November 2, 2015 at 8:08 pm

    I think I can guess the theme! It’s “Stories reviewed on The City of Doors this week”!

    Also, Pinkie’s First Cupcake sounds cute to say the least.

    • Griffin

      November 2, 2015 at 8:17 pm

      It was pretty adorable.

  2. Soge

    November 3, 2015 at 3:50 pm

    “it makes no sense that Princess Luna has not at least offered to use the spell at some previous time”

    It has been a while since I read Diamond Eyes, but isn’t there something about how Luna went to look for a spell that did that just to surprise Snowdrop?

    • Griffin

      November 3, 2015 at 6:06 pm

      “We’ve arrived at a dark entrance, Snowdrop. Together we proceed in darkness. But first, I must ask your permission to cast a spell on you. I want it to both surprise you and prepare you at the same time for what we might encounter ahead.”

      That’s where she mentions the surprise. I double checked the scene where Princess Luna first uses it and she doesn’t mention anything else about searching for the spell. And even so, why wait until right when they are about to go into a dark cave to use it?

  3. Titanium Dragon

    November 6, 2015 at 4:30 pm

    Glad you liked Dawn. I had fun with it, and I plan on revisiting the history of Luna and Celestia in that particular continuity another time.


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