Pony Stories 561

21 Feb

Hey, the numbers don’t lie. I post stuff here and my views go up. Amazing! Had gotten down to single digit views with the long away period instead of my usual 2-3 dozen. Today’s big master review list fact: The word ritual shows up only four times, and two of those are for the plural rituals.

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  • The Things Tavi Says by shortskirtsandexplosions

The Things Tavi Says by shortskirtsandexplosions

I think I’ve figured it out! SS&E is a good author, but with somewhat serious stylistic flaws. The major one finally hit me. He is terrible at pacing. That’s why his comedies and slice of life pieces end up so good. Because comedy needs timing, but not pacing and slice of life kind of meanders anyway. I realized this when the plot of this story kicked into gear at about the halfway point. I was really enjoying the story up to then, it being a slice of life meandering tale from the start with hints of interesting backstory popping up. Side note, you will get tired of Vinyl commenting that Octavia saved her life. Once or twice every chapter.

Anyway, when the plot kicked it my enjoyment lessened and I realized because it was still somewhat meandering when I just wanted all the characters to get on with it already. I still am very jealous of SS&E’s output. As is anyone who writes should be. His stuff may not be excellent all the time, but is rarely bad and often hovers around above average.

I also realized that he has the same strength as Lovecraft, in a different direction. SS&E’s prose is just a joy to read. Not in the clever or deep meaning turn of phrase sort of way (though he does have his moments) but in that you can just roll along with his writing like taking a walk through beautiful scenery. Lovecraft had a gift with prose and so does SS&E. Which factors right back into the pacing. When a story meanders, having that meandering prose be enjoyable by itself means the reader is in no hurry to stop reading or to get to what happens next. Yet if plot gets introduced, the reader starts focusing more on what the characters actually say and do and the slow walk through scenery feel is somewhat lost.

Down to details. I liked the version of Vinyl Scratch here. At least at the beginning. The reason for her shades and not talking is a form of magical synesthesia. Which is used quite effectively. A bit disorienting trying to keep the colors matched with their emotions, but I like it when a story doesn’t exposit at the reader so that point actually falls into the positive category.

Story also has a lot of the pseudo philosophy an author puts in when they need a character to be very thoughtful and idly musing on the world beyond the author’s ability. Now, I’m not sure if that was the intention here. Just felt a lot like it for the first half of the story. I didn’t mind too much because it was just an enjoyable read and seeing the colors of the world through Vinyl’s eyes was interesting. Might turn some people off though.

The plot is basically ponies being stupid due to emotional flaws. That’s basically it. No big troubles, just personal struggles against fairly simple problems made huge due to mental damage. Just wanted to smack both Vinyl and Octavia so much during the second half of the story. A lot. Yet I can’t really throw stones since I’m constantly stuck on simple problems that my brain glitches keep making huge hurdles. So that part was a little close to home.

Has a Equestria Girls section that I still can’t see the point of. I was really looking forward to seeing the Vinyls chat, but nope. The only thing it does is make Vinyl to obsess about her feelings for Octavia more because their human counterparts kiss. That kickstart to the plot could have been accomplished any number of ways. Oh, and you should always forgive your enemies. Unless they are sirens possibly suffering mental trauma from losing their magic and voices. In which case beat them up and let the cops arrest them before going back to Equestria.

Starlight Glimmer has a few small cameos post-redemption as Twilight’s student. Which doesn’t go anywhere. Flash Sentry and Twilight Sparkle shipping.

As for the end (spoilers), I wanted to be disappointed that they didn’t hook up in a traditional manner. Given that I praised Your Truly for not doing that it seems a bit hypocritical of me to think that. I hope they at least got to have sex. At that point they are two smokin hot and gorgeous ladies filled with passion and their two styles have left them with skills both physical and magical with great health. I bet they could have some very intense fun in bed. Heck, at that point Vinyl doesn’t even have to worry about her own voice tearing up her brain.


Posted by on February 21, 2016 in Ponies, Reading 2016, Reviews


4 responses to “Pony Stories 561

  1. Present Perfect

    February 21, 2016 at 7:13 pm

    Can’t pass up those ddetailed details. :V

    • Griffin

      February 21, 2016 at 10:24 pm

      Yep. Got to stand out from the pack of reviewers somehow.

  2. Pascoite Fics

    February 22, 2016 at 9:03 am

    You should post some photos of your physique. It apparently has nice compolsition.

    And to follow on from my comment on FiMFiction you replied to: I follow you for both reasons. This is a good example of a column that wasn’t just a quick-hit review, but delved into some more in-depth aspects of the writing. You’d be surprised how many “big name” reviewers don’t even do that.

    • Griffin

      February 22, 2016 at 1:42 pm

      Thanks. I kid about my quality sometimes, but I do know that I have my moments. Glad I can give the occasional bit of enjoyment and/or insight.

      Plus, what other reviewer will give you ddtailed details about physique compolsition screens?


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