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Pony Stories 598

25 Apr

Nope, didn’t get more than a paragraph done of the story for the writeoff. I still plan to finish it. Just have trouble focusing and finding the time to write. Which is just ridiculous since free time is my most plentiful resource.

  • Princess Celestia is in your bed. by ocalhoun
  • Nopony Expects the Spanish Inquisition by BrownDog77
  • Things Best Left Unknown by FoughtDragon01

Princess Celestia is in your bed. by ocalhoun

Hee. That was funny and silly and fluffy and I enjoyed it lots.

Nopony Expects the Spanish Inquisition by BrownDog77

This was hilarious. Highly recommended if you have seen and enjoyed the Monty Python sketch it is based on. I found this a great ponyfied version. Plus the end was just hilarious.

Things Best Left Unknown by FoughtDragon01

I have some issue with some of the basic premise of the story. That of Twilight experimenting with the potion that let her view visions of past events. It was clear to me that each time in the show she was witness to one of the uses of the elements of harmony. In this story Twilight seemed to assume it was visions of Princess Celestia’s past. There was even a mention that in each vision of the show that Princess Celestia was the first thing she saw each time. Which is untrue. After finishing the story I an only say I found it really clumsy. The technical  aspects were fine. I didn’t notice any bad typos or awkward phrases. Yet on the conceptual level it was rushed and clumsy. Also the moral of the story is that leaders have to hold themselves above of emotional responses when they make decisions, yet Princess Celestia’s mistake had nothing to do with her status as a Princess. Lots of little adjustments could have fixed this. Such as to make her mistake was the squad of soldiers was there on her orders. Makes more sense, easier to twist into the lie that was put into the history books, and adds a layer of guilt. Plus I have issue with Princess Celestia having the power to destroy a entire canyon city but not able to easily win a war.

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Posted by on April 25, 2016 in Ponies, Reading 2016, Reviews

 

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